Multiple Draft Sense Poem

Write a sense poem. Start by thinking of where or what your poem will be about. Mine is about swimming in the Missouri River. Each line should represent a different sense: I see..., I touch..., I hear..., I smell..., I feel.... The last line ends with I am... First write the poem with the sense listed at the beginning. This will you create a line that is dedicated to that sense. After the poem is finished, take out the sense and you will have a completed poem. Do one more draft and look at word choice. How can you change the verbs, nouns, and modifiers to make them even better? Use a Thesaurus, think about sound language, and work to create vivid images.

 


Sense Poem

 

I see brown matted dirt, yellow granules, white creamy sand show the history of the summerI touch my legs rub the upside down life jacket around me like diaper

I hear the “who hots” of bare-footed people skipping over hot sand fill the air

I smell algae, fish, and river scents combine with air like a lightly sprayed perfume

I feel shivers run down my back as I hit a cold spot

I am swimming in the Missouri

 

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brown matted dirt, yellow granules, white creamy sand show the history of the summer

my legs rub the scratchy plastic of the diapered life jacket keeping me afloat

the “who hots” of bare-footed people skipping over hot sand fill the air

algae, fish, and river scents combine with air like a lightly sprayed perfume

shivers run down my back as I hit a cold spot

I am swimming in the Missouri